Review 12

the Zogg 7/14/12. chapter 12

This chapter had serious Mood Whiplash. It went to a moral debate between Archer and Tokiomi. Berserker and Zouken meeting. And another creepy Sola-Shinji seen. I hope they're the next to die. They creep me out.

Anyway, Kirei finally losing it and breaking the Fourth Wall and becomeing the Big Bad was hilarious. but i have some critism. first is while kirei will just dispose of his dad's body using off-screen powers, who's he going to pin the death on. He can't hide that his old man died forever, he's gotta find somebody to pin it on, and risei was killed by a Black Key. Major evidence implicating kirei for the crime. Also, don't make Kirei a complete clone of Deadpool. Have some differences between them. Like Kirei being a Omnicidal Maniac trying to destroy the fic as a mercy to the world so the characters won't have to suffeer as your playthings. While Assassin just goes along because as he puts it "since he's the guy who pays the TV bill now." Basically, give Kirei some more somber, serious personality traits beffitting a Big Bad in the Nasuverse. Don't make him a complete clone. Make his Trolling a bit more subtle than Deadpool's to keep things serious.